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The Story Behind "What We Want To Tell You

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The Story behind
"What We Want to Tell You..."


by Magna M. Diaz, Bilingual Librarian, Frankford High School


The greatest gift a teacher can have is to have students who are eager to learn
. There is nothing better than to see the spark of interest and the desire to know more. I have seen this in the eyes of my Teen Writers.

When the author, Judith Kristen, called me in June of 2004, I remember wondering if I wanted to have a program so early in September of the following school year. I took a chance and booked the author. It has been one of the best decisions I ever made. Judith Kristen came in September and talked about her book, "The Purple Hat Gang" and immediately connected with the students. There was magic in the air the first day of the program.

Judy then offered to have a one day workshop with my students, and I opened the workshop to those interested in serious writing. Sixteen students came and sat and listened and shared their writing with the author and each other. Sixteen students found a connection to one another and became friends. The students who chose to participate in the workshop were from 9th, 10th, 11th, and 12th grade. They included boys and girls and their cultural background was incredibly diverse. Half of this original group graduated in June of 2005.

In September of that same year, the Teen Writers Group entered a new phase. Judy came back and gave another talk to our students. This time she included her second book, "Olivia Twist...a quest for the glass half-full". The teen writers not only greeted her warmly, but they asked for even more of her time. Judy saw such eagerness and so much desire in these young writers that she sat with me and we talked about preparing a lesson plan that would focus on their writing, culminating in a published book of their written work.

The students included in this book have worked very hard and gone through the process of writing, editing, and reviewing of their work - many, many times over. They sat and listened to their peers go through the entire process and they have come back for more! I am proud to say that this book is a result of all their efforts and struggles as apprentice writers - tragedy, comedy, fantasy, real drama - stories straight from their hearts and life experiences.

The magic of all of this is that Judy graduated from Frankford High School in 1965. She sets her books in our little Northwood neighborhood of Northeast Philadelphia. She gives back her heart and soul to help our students find what has taken her so long to find.

I remember smiling when I first heard Judy say to the group, "If your ship doesn't come in... swim out to it!"

From Judith Kristen on Frankford High School...

As a graduate of Frankford High School , Class of 1965, I have quite a unique perspective on “The Pioneers” of the new millennium at my old Alma Mater.

Frankford High’s history spans nearly a century and it sits right in the center of a once quaint little part of Philadelphia known as Northwood.
Now, Northwood has been urbanized.
Not that you still can’t see the one-hundred-year-old Sycamore trees lining Wakeling Street, or the beautiful old houses with mahogany staircases, exquisite crown moldings, and pocket doors… they are there, but the setting in atmosphere is quite different than the one I remember as a child.

The children I teach either have two working parents they rarely see, only one parent at home, or have no family at all. Most of these students and their families are struggling to make ends meet 365 days a year. Some of Northwood is now Section 8 housing. And drugs are not something that you buy at a pharmacy in these new Northwood days, this is the hard stuff, students can buy it on the street, on the bus, and in the classroom. These kids struggle with their past, their today, and their tomorrows.
Many have been abused physically, emotionally, mentally, or sexually. They know what it’s like to be starved for affection and what it feels like going to bed hungry. 97% of the students at Frankford these days qualify for free lunches and live below the poverty line. In 1965, less than 1% of Frankford students lived at that level.
Now, the streets aren’t safe, the neighborhoods aren’t safe, and the schools aren’t safe. Most of these kids can’t read well or even write a decent sentence.
What happened?
Frankford High, once one of the finest and most prestigious schools in this country, has now been labeled by CNN as one of the most persistently
dangerous schools in America .

So…

Is there still hope for the school that used to be known as, “The Northwood Castle?

Yes. I believe that with all of my heart… and with good reason.

Back in 2004, when I finally accomplished writing a book of my own, one that had been rattling around in my head since 1961, I decided to take that love and passion for the world of books that saved me, back to the kids at my old school
-- apparently it saved some of them, too.

I always found peace and solace in writing and reading. I loved everything about the written word. I shared those feelings with the students from the get-go. Reading is magic. It takes you places and teaches you things about life that might otherwise have passed you by. And writing? It gives you a voice… and we all so desperately need to be heard, especially these days.
And, the eighteen kids whose stories you are about to read couldn’t agree more!

These kids know what’s happening, and they feel as if “The powers that be” give them no voice, that’s why you’ll hear them screaming to you within the pages of this book.

They also want to hear voices from their parents… parents who will become involved in their lives, to take the time to become actively engaged in their entire learning process – by coming to teacher conferences, school functions, by helping them with their homework, projects, etc… It’s not too much to ask or expect! It really isn’t. As one of my kids said, “They don’t want us to be in a gang. They want us to stay out of trouble. Then we’re gonna need to function like a real family! …And we gotta get some pride back in our school and our neighborhood!”

They want to see the leaders of education protect and provide decent schooling. They don’t want “streamlining” to mean the need to eliminate libraries and school librarians. You will never see a college, university, or high end school/academy/prep school anywhere in this country eliminate their school librarian and their library. NEVER. They understand that when you empower yourself with books, you magnify yourself, and your life is forever full and interesting and significant.

If we can once again have a decent, kind, understanding, clear-thinking, passionate, stick-by-the-old-golden-rule system, then Frankford High School and every other high school in this city can regain its former glory, along with a strong sense of community, while producing decent, kind, understanding, clear-thinking, passionate, stick-by-the-old-golden-rule students who will become citizens of the world – those glorious souls “of” “by” and “for” the people who will make their mark on society a positive one for generations and generations to come.

This is what these children say to me.
And I hear them.
And they know it.
Now…
What they want to know is…

Are you listening?

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Lesson Plan for "What We Want to Tell You..."

The Teen Writers Guild of Frankford High School: A journey on
how to become a published author.


SCOPE OF WORK FOR PRODUCTION OF INDIVIDUAL HIGH SCHOOL STUDENT BOOK

Overall objectives:
• To encourage teen talent and their love for reading and writing
• To improve their knowledge of the English language, grammar and syntax
• To learn how to critically review books
• To learn the process of publishing a book and to learn about proper layout, editing, format, rewriting, and cover creation
• To create an experience which garners life-long skills and the opportunity of becoming a new generation of published teenagers, who may, one day, become published adults
• To publish a book that includes the best-written works of the students participating in the Writers Guild, and making it available on Barnes and Noble, Amazon, and other venues.

Benchmarks: Reading, Research & Writing 9-12 Benchmarks
• Standard: Reading - Apply effective reading strategies to comprehend, organize, analyze, synthesize, and evaluate texts to construct meaning.
• Standard: Writing - Plan, draft, revise, and publish writing using correct grammar, sentence structure, punctuation, spelling, and effective vocabulary, appropriate to the purpose, context, and audience.
• Standard: Literature - Listen to, read, recognize, and respond to literature as a record of human experience that provides individual perspective, promotes understanding of multiple writing styles

Assessment as individuals
• Read a variety of pieces: poetry, journals, autobiographies, diaries, memoirs, fiction and non-fiction.
• Develop a personal anthology of favorite poems, short stories, illustrations, and quotations, and justify choices.
• Write with controlled and/or subtle organization and with command of the stylistic aspects of composition
• Revise writing to improve style, word choice, sentence variety and subtlety of meaning after rethinking how questions of purpose, audience and genre have been addressed.

Assessments as a group:
Meet with peers to give and receive feedback and revise written work to clarify the meaning and make it more effective in communicating the intended message to the intended audience by:
• Adding and deleting details, explanations and clarifying difficult passages
• Rearranging words, sentences, and paragraphs to improve or clarify meaning
• Rethinking or rewriting the piece for different audiences and purposes.
• Edit written work for standard English spelling and usage, evidenced by pieces that show and contain:

* No significant errors in the use of pronouns, nouns, adjectival and adverbial forms, and coordinating and subordinating conjunctions
* No significant errors in the spelling of frequently used words and the correct use of commonly confused terms and few significant errors in the spelling of commonly misspelled and rare words, the less common capitalization conventions, the colon, semicolon, hyphen, dash, apostrophe, quotations marks, italics, marginal notes, and footnotes.
* No significant errors in the common conventions of capitalization and ending punctuation marks and common uses of the comma.

Technology:
• Microsoft Word
• Microsoft Publisher or Adobe Photoshop for book layout and book cover.
• Internet research
• Email for communication between author and students.

Evaluation:
• Critical reading and sharing among peers.
• Constructive criticism among peers to find the right voice.
• From author through shared reading with group and individually through email
• Final product
• Proof reading Galleys
• Published book!!!


Bibliography:

Coelho, Paul. The Alchemist
An Andalusian shepherd boy named Santiago travels from his homeland in Spain to the Egyptian desert in search of a treasure buried in the Pyramids. Somewhere along the way Santiago meets a Gypsy woman, a man who calls himself king, and an alchemist, all of whom point him in the direction of his quest. No one knows what the treasure is, or if Santiago will be able to surmount the obstacles along the way. But what starts out as a journey to find worldly goods turns into a discovery of the treasures found within. The story of Santiago and his "search" is an eternal testament to the transforming power of our dreams and the importance of listening to our hearts.

Dickens, Charles. A Christmas Carol
A Christmas Carol (Published 1843) is one of the best loved and most quoted of all English language stories. The best stories are always about good versus evil. In this book students easily see the good and evil are all within one character, and that anyone can turn their life around that anything is possible. (a good message) Dickens flair for characters has also left us with two who have gone past the story and entered into the English speaking culture -- Scrooge and Tiny Tim.

The Freedom Writers with Gruwell, Erin. The Freedom Writers Diary
Students will relate to the powerful entries from The Freedom Writers own diaries. This book is a truly remarkable example of how hard work, courage, and the spirit of determination can change lives - forever.

Kristen, Judith. The Purple Hat Gang
The Purple Hat Gang is a coming of age story about five best girlfriends back in 1961. It is a joyful trip to a softer time in America that everyone lovingly called Camelot. The Purple Hat Gang is about the strength one derives from good, healthy friendships. It’s also about heartache, teen angst, first love, parental difficulties, abuse, adoption, loyalty, compassion and kindness. As one High School Junior said, “It’s a true to life story about the power of friendship and the importance of having someone to talk to and lend you a hand when the rest of the world tunes you out. In twenty years time, this book will be called an American Classic.

Kristen, Judith. Olivia Twist, a quest for the glass half-full
Olivia Twist is a story of a young girl abandoned by both birth parents, left to be raised in the loving care of her paternal grandmother, a situation that many children are familiar with these days. Their relationship is a glorious one: happy, loving, kind, and caring until her Mom dies the day before Olivia’s 11th birthday. She is then forced to move in with her biological father and his already established second family. Trials and tribulations abound and, three years later, the young girl decides to emancipate herself from her ugly home life.
This story is also about a child who learns to empower herself, because she knows that there IS a better life out there, and, it’s a heartbreaker and an eye-opener to watch her continuing and tenacious search to find it. The main character also finds great solace and joy in keeping a daily journal. The child’s entries are captivating, teaching, and inspiring.


NeuBaur, Bonnie. The Write-Brain Workbook: 366 Exercises to Liberate Your Writing.
This book is excellent! It can be used as a writing workbook for every child participating in the writing project. The benefits are tremendous!

Silverstein, Shel. "The Giving Tree"
The Giving Tree (barely 3,500 words) has sold hundreds of millions of copies world-wide, proving that you don’t need to write a 200,000 word book to guarantee a best seller! The Giving Tree is a soft, sweet, short book that packs a wallop. The messages of kindness, want, and friendship are clearly defined. Silverstein’s drawings are deceptively simple -- black-and-white line sketches that leave plenty of white space on the page -- yet each illustration demonstrates a subtlety of emotion and change that is as captivating as it is basic. The Giving Tree can be read over and over again, for a child’s understanding of its message will likely change as the child grows. A delightful and touching story.

Stine, R.L. (Any of his books)
Author of the Goosebumps, Fear Street series shows students what a page turner is all about. At the end of each chapter the reader is left with such a powerful sentence or two, they want to read more! This is what we encourage student writers to do with their work. Make their reader WANT more!!! Stine gives an excellent example of this over and over again!

Truss, Lynn. Eats, Shoots, and Leaves: The Zero Tolerance Approach to Punctuation.
An easy to read and comprehend grammar book. Teens will enjoy reading it for fun and even for elucidation; a lot of much needed information is packed into this small book.

Dictionaries
Thesauruses


Calendar of Events

1st Visit

Author/Book Talk Session

Book process discussion with general group of students. This first visit is to gather information and talk about the overall details: what each student must produce, along with necessary editing, rewriting, layout, cover, title, bios, acknowledgments, photos, and what a galley is, and submission of the final, corrected manuscript.

We discuss Shel Silverstein’s book, The Giving Tree, after reading it that day.

They are required to read: The Purple Hat Gang, Olivia Twist... a quest for the glass half-full, The Freedom Writers Diary, The Eats, Shoots, and Leaves book as well as The Write-Brain Workbook. These books are always accessible to the students throughout the writing process. Ms. Kristen gives all students her email address for communication about their work, the book process, etc.

2nd Visit

Writing/Discussion/All Day Workshop

Second visit is to sort out each students work. Each student will submit five pieces of their best work. This work will be read aloud to the group and we will choose the best three submissions (more or fewer will be chosen according to quality of work). We will also go over what needs to be changed, rewritten, and edited. Students still continue emailing Ms. Kristen. The communication helps them with their work in-between visits and answers their many questions.


3rd Visit

All Day Workshop

The students must submit their newly edited work. The author will go over the submissions and check for content, punctuation, and syntax. The students will then go over their work, (again) as well as that of fellow Guild Members to see what corrections are still needed, and what work will eventually be qualified for publication - and what will not. A title for the book will also be suggested and chosen on that day.

Email between author and students is a given throughout the rest of the process.

4th Visit

All Day Workshop

The 4th author visit again is a rewriting and editing session. We also read and discuss one of RL Stine’s books from The Goosebumps Series.

School Art teacher or Computer instructor will work with the children on this day to begin cover design. Students will supply ideas, drawings and photos. Font Style and coloring will also be discussed and chosen. The students will learn that a book shouldn’t be judged by its cover...but a good-looking cover is indeed a plus.

Should a school be unable to fulfill this aspect of the book process, the Publisher will supply a suitable cover.

5th Visit

All Day Workshop

Judith Kristen arrives for bio/photo session and writing workshop. The students will submit their bios and a black and white photo of each student will be taken to be placed above their book bio insert. We will also go over all work ready for submission. Those students who have not corrected them properly, failed to follow instructions, or failed to do so entirely, will be dropped from publication. They learn the meaning of DEADLINE MEANS DEADLINE.

Progress on cover design will be checked.


6th Visit

All Day Workshop

Author and Writers Guild read and discuss Dickens, A Christmas Carol. We check our work once again for errors and read it aloud for flow and ease of reading.

7th Visit

All Day Workshop

Once again we check our work for errors. Guild Members read aloud and consult with fellow guild member about the quality of their work. The cover must also be completed on this day. All work, bios, student photos and cover artwork is then submitted to the publisher.

8th Visit

All Day Workshop- Galley revisions

The published work will be ready to look at in galley form. The galley is the work the students have submitted in exactly the style and layout that it will appear in the book. This is where the final corrections are made - the last step before we see the book in its true form. After this NO FURTHER CORRECTIONS CAN BE MADE WITHOUT SERIOUS PUBLICATION DELAYS AND HEAVY PENALTY COSTS FROM THE PUBLISHER!!!

9th Visit

PUBLISHED BOOK!!!

The 9th visit is party time! The book has arrived in its final form! Every member of The Writers Guild is now officially a Published Author!!!

Each student and teacher involved will receive a free copy of their book.The book will appear on all major book vendors web-sites: Barnes & Noble, Amazon, Booksamillion, etc.

 

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